23/03/2020
Task 1 vẫn rất cần sự thống nhất các ý tưởng với nhau. Nếu đã nêu gì trong overview thì phải phân tich bằng được ở body nhé. Mà overview chung chung, không có giá trị thông tin thì rất dễ viết lung tung vì không có đính hướng rõ ràng. Vì thế, cứ phân tích hình cho kĩ, viết overview chặt chẽ xíu thì thân bài sẽ gắng kết hơn, đảm bảo điểm cohesion và coherence sẽ cao. Mà nếu chưa cao thì chúng ta nên gặp nhau! LOL 😜😜😜😂😂
TASK: The bar charts show the employment rates of men and women between 60 and 64 in different countries in 1990 and 2001.
1. ANALYSIS
There are two bar charts showing respectively the employment rates of men and women over 2 periods 1991 and 2001. As these are two-component bar charts, I will compare differences of 2 components in each chart separately:
- Chart 1 (Women employment): only Australia had the widest gap—higher for the later year, 2001 between 2 components; the rest show little differences.
- Chart 2 (Men employment): all nations observed particular declines in the number of men.
2.FROM THE ANALYSIS, WE WRITE THE OVERVIEW
After ten-year period, except Australia where the rate of female labor force was radically higher, the rest nations observed minimal changes in the proportion of this social group. As for male counterpart, there were particular declines in the percentage of male participants in all surveyed labor markets.
3. FROM THE OVERVIEW, WE DEVELOP ITS IDEAS INTO BODY PARAGRAPHS
Body paragraph 1: the first idea of the overview: “After ten-year period, except Australia where the rate of female labor force was far higher, the rest surveyed nations observed minimal changes in the proportion of this social group.”
Sub-analysis:
- Australia increased by 8%.
- The rest: Belgium unchanged at 7.5%; USA increased 3, and Japan decreased 3%.
Body paragraph 2: the second idea of the overview: “There was a marked decline in the percentage of male participants in the labor market in all nations.”
Sub-analysis
- Belgium decreased by 60%, widest gap; Australia declined 26%.
- USA and Japan respectively declined 18% and 12% over the given time frame.