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Task 2

*Parents, usually mothers, give up the work, choose to stay home and look after the family. Some people think the government should give them a salary. Do you agree or disagree? Give the reasons from your knowledge and experience.*

*Writing prediction*

Topic 1- With the development of technology and science, some people believe that there is no great value of artists such as musicians and painters. What are the things artists can do but the scientist cannot? Why art should be encouraged more?

Topic 2 – Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others think that people cannot expect to enjoy a job and having a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Topic 3: Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Topic 4: Many people believe that counties should produce food for all population and import food as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Topic 5: Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen at TV and the internet. Discuss both opinion and give your own opinion.

Topic 6: Throughout the history, people dream to build a perfect society while they have not agreed how the ideal society would be like. What is the most important element you think to make a perfect society? How do people do to achieve an ideal society？

Topic 7: Some people believe that in order to give opportunities to new generation companies should encourage high level employees who are older than 55 to retire. Do you agree or disagree?

Topic 8: Charities and organizations always give special names to particular days such as ‘National Children’s Day’ and ‘National Non-smoking Day’. What are the causes of these particular days? How effective are they?

Topic 9: Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons? What are the effects on the society?

Topic 10: University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Topic 11: Some people think young people should go to university for their further education while others think they should been encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etcetera to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Topic 12: Nuclear energy is a better choice for meeting increasing demand, agree or disagree?

Topic 13: Economic progress is one way to measure the success of one country, while some people think there are other factors. What other factors should be considered? Within these factors, do you think anyone is more important than the others?

Topic 14: Most countries want to improve standard of living through economic development, however, others think social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?

Topic 15: Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, others think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Task 2

*Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?*

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Answer correction

[08/07, 21:43] Sajida Ahmed: Introduction

Well written

You can also begin in this way

*Technology is getting increasingly involved in industry, commerce, and business.*

Then paraphrase
Give your opinion
[08/07, 21:44] Sajida Ahmed: First body paragraph

Either write to begin with or
Firstly
[08/07, 21:53] Sajida Ahmed: First body paragraph

To begin with, these advanced machines *have endowed*.........targets timely.For example,(use of comma)when workers........,they get exhausted and *have to*(maintain tense) rest......further.In contrast,machines can work for days......without a break,thus........productivity.Secondly,these........machines can als contribute.......of the country which in turn will......of the citizens.For example,..............
[08/07, 21:54] Sajida Ahmed: Advantages

*Machines are clearly able to do many jobs better than humans can, especially in areas that require high levels of accuracy or calculations using large amounts of data. For example, robots are being developed that can carry out surgical procedures with greater precision than a human doctor, and we already have cars that use sensors and cameras to drive themselves. Such technologies can improve safety by reducing the likelihood of human errors. It is easy to imagine how these developments, and many others, will steadily improve our quality of life.*
[08/07, 21:55] Sajida Ahmed: Escalate(spelling)
[08/07, 21:58] Sajida Ahmed: Second body paragraph
Despite of the above mentioned advantages/benefits, *this trend*(singular) of labour replacement by machines *has* some *detrimental* (check your spelling)

No comma before which
[08/07, 21:58] Sajida Ahmed: Second body paragraph

Either write also/consequently
[08/07, 22:02] Sajida Ahmed: Second body paragraph

Consequently,its contributing to poverty.
Thus can be exemplified........ in 2012,which showed.........employees had lost jobs...........due to machine/technological advancements.
[08/07, 22:03] Sajida Ahmed: Second body paragraph

Few errors

Idea well explained with example
[08/07, 22:05] Sajida Ahmed: Conclusion

Summarise your opinion

Then give suggestions

Spelling errors

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Essay written by Hamza (paid evaluation)

Modern technology has brought revolutionary advancements in our day to day life.This has provided man with machines, which have substituted significant amount of labour work. Although it has some damaging effects on the employement of labour class but overall the positove points outnumber them.
To begin with, firstly, these advanced machines have endow companies to be more efficient in achieving their targets timely. For example when workers are given some physical task, they get exhausted after few hours of physical exertion and had to rest before they continue further, while the machines instead can work for days without a break, thus increasing the productivity. Secondly, these highly equipped machines can also contribute towards the economy of the country and which in turn will ameliorate the quality of life of the citizens . For instance, the machines working day and night will dramatically escalte the production, which will result in the improvement of economy.
Apart from the advantages, this trend of labour replacement by machines have some detrimemental effect upon the employement rate. As more and more machines are advancing, they are taking over the jobs of the workers, which will result in unemployment . Also consequently its contributing to poverty. This can be exemplified by a survey conducted in Dubai in 2012, which showed that two thousand employee's lost jobs in a span of two years due to machines advancements.
In conclusion, the advancement in the technology has benefited big companies and economies of different companies in the contemprory world. However, governement should focus on its negative aspects by providing alternative jobs tothe poor workers and empower their coming generation with

REAL EXAM QUESTIONS

21. Some people consider sport to be their carrier and role in the society. For others it is mostly a workout to keep fit. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
22. Some people think that higher salary is important when choosing a company to work for, while others think that good atmosphere at a workplace is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion with relevant examples.
23. Sometimes celebrities get invited to international aid events. Do you think that such events deviate from their main purpose by inviting famous people?
24. Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
25. Some people say that public libraries should be free, otherwise they are just a waste of money, especially because modern technologies and the internet allow easy access to resources. Discuss and give your point of view.
26. Usually students have to study a range of different subjects. Some people believe that learning subjects without being interested in them won’t be beneficial. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
27. Nowadays people get married and have children after the age of 30. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples based on your experience.
28. Usually students have to study a range of different subjects. Some people believe that learning subjects without being interested in them won’t be beneficial. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
29. A recent study showed that both developed and developing countries prosper because of the economic growth. People from developing countries are happier than before while people from developed countries are not as happy as they were in the past. Why is this happening? How can this situation be improved? Give your opinion including relevant examples and your own experience.
30. Some people think that a car is the best way to travel in cities while others believe a bicycle is a better way. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
31. Some people believe that the government should pay for and offer housing to people who lost their homes or cannot afford them. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion. Use specific reasons and examples to support it.
32. Sometimes tourists may damage touristic sites. Explain what some of the negative effects may be. Suggest some solutions to this problem.
33. Computers have made the world a better place to live. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
34. In many countries there are people with extremely high income. Some say it is good for the country, while others claim that governments should limit salaries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
35. Nowadays as a part of the educational process students are working for a company for a short period of time without pay. Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this? Give your own opinion.
36. Some people believe that the use of mobile phones in public is as annoying as smoking and should be banned, similarly to smoking. Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.
37. Nowadays many people follow fashion trends and think that it’s very important. Is it a good or a bad development? Include reasons and examples from your personal experience.
38. Many people think that too much attention and resources are given to protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
39. Some people believe that money is the most important factor for achieving happiness. However, others believe that happiness has nothing to do with money. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion and examples.
40. Some people think that children should have some classes outside their schools, visiting local companies or public enterprises for some real life experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.
41. Museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists, not the local people. Why is this so? What could be done to encourage more local visitors? Please include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
42. Some people believe that computers help to make the world a better place. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.
43. Most leaders or directors generally belong to an older age group, but some people believe that young leaders are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.
44. Some people think that the government should fund music, dance and arts lessons for children. Others think that they should be funded by private businesses or by children’s families. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
45. Nowadays in many countries people are following the latest fashion, hairstyles and so on. Why are they so influenced by fashion? Is it a positive or a negative development?
46. Nowadays scientists and tourists can travel to remote natural environments such as the South Pole. What are the advantages and the disadvantages of this development?
47. Some say that music is as important as other subjects in schools, especially at the preschool level. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.
48. Some schools agree that fast food restaurants and supermarkets can promote their products in school and that schools benefit from it. Is it a positive or a negative development?
49. Some people are reducing their walks, however many health experts say that walking is the best exercise to maintain health. Why do people walk less? What might encourage people to walk longer distances?
50. Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled. Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples.

ANSWER CORRECTION(essay written by wajid)

Introduction

Advertisement is *considered* ..........depending on the circumstances.

Detrimental(spelling error)

Introduction can be written in this way as well

*Advertisements are used by various companies to boost sales. If proper measures such as choosing the right medium and highlighting key features are taken, these may increase a company’s revenue.In my opinion they may be beneficial as* *well as detrimental*...........

First body paragraph

Creativity.............advertisements.People show great interest........that *mainly consist*......new items.The Common public *is* *keen* ..........in different commercials.In addition to this, *low price* is another factor that *compels* the citizens to watch these *advertisements.*(full form)

First body paragraph

Example not relevant

Second body paragraph

Advertisements provide extra information to users (to a user) which is helpful to produce desired results.

Give example

Negative impacts

commercials mainly target children as / because they are more impressionable than adults. After watching these ads, kids force their parents to buy those useless products.

Give example

Conclusion
*To summarise,while some advertisements are beneficial for the society, others are* *not. However,every individual has to be*
*aware of each and everything happening in the society.*

You need to work on your lexical resources.

First body paragraph

Poorly constructed sentence and the example does not match the idea (loss of coherence).

*There are many serious sentence structuring issues in your essay.*

Task response=6
Coherence cohesion=6
Lexicalvresource=5.5 to 6
Grammar=5.5
Overall=5.5bands

Successful companies use advertising to make more sales. What can make an advertisement very effective? Do you think this is a bad thing or a good thing for the society?